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The Image that started this off
@ArchQuantum challenged @ProjectHelios to a duel. They both would write a short story using that image as the basis of the story. @DwightSchruteismyhero would make sure the terms of the duel were followed.
Post in question: https://imgur.com/gallery/GhwXu/comment/1043049909
This is an alt account so it won’t be about points.
Now to deliver the goods; the following is the short story by ProjectHelios:
The short story written by ArchQuantum is as follows:
IndubitablyGullible
I've never appreciated the grim reapers until now. Hug :(
RobBobertyYT
I love the idea of a walk that purifies on the way to heaven. Anyone can get in but the walk is harder for every sin.
jjninja850
the second is great
ImCanadianAndILikeItEh
The second! The seconds better, they're both good but I prefer the second
TheHeathLedger
Both are wonderful, but the second one takes the trophy here for me..
strugglesnuggler
I still like the idea of Death as an overworked salary man with a garbage bag. "Should've ducked idiot, get in the bag."
adghatd
Velociraptorex
The second is way better
theSungamer
Just went and upvotes all of @ArchQuantum 's posts as a thanks for making that story
Tyrannotron
Reminds me a little of Dead Like Me.
MeinCovfefe
You're a constipator, peanut, you disturb my shit and that's annoying.
ButIAmTheManager
Actually that isn't pepper, that's chemicals.
whyisthisusernametaken
Nice
CheekyHorseBoy
Am I the only one that keeps hearing Bill Doors voice?
lovehandlesmessiah
I LIKE WHAT YOU GOT.
Crschnei
+1 for @ArchQuantum
DopeyFuckedaPenguinOnceAgain
TL:DR.... favourite this for later reading when you have time or get your ass back up there now, both of them are an interesting perspective
RickterDeathBeard
I liked both of them. The last is the winner though it was too good. I'd definitely read more by both.
NeverAngel
The clear winner here is the second <3 Outside the duel, both are wonderful
stormnutt21
Hands down @archquantum. That was amazing.
AnyaJenkins
The first one is basically Dead Like Me.
TheRevolutionist
Both were good. But definitely prefer the second one. Actually got teary eyed for Death.
Ninjacuttingonions
Everybody's saying that the first one is dead like me but it reminds me more of "On a pale horse" by Piers Anthony. Which is a great novel.
adghatd
I thought the same thing! Actually motivated me to start re-reading the book.
Fidgetysmudge
They should make a website called Literagur where this is an actual thing. People write short stories based on pictures, gifs and memes?
Fidgetysmudge
Then compete for upvotes and down votes based on the story quality. Writers would eat that shit up! Someone make an app...go on
lurkingupvotetroll
I remembered trying that once here on imgur and those dead fuckers down vote me saying blah blah this is an image site. Name calling & shit
nero4ty2
imgur is fickle about some things, back in the day dumps were few and far between and often got downvoted, now they are all over the place
lurkingupvotetroll
So true. Temperamental.
TheBufferkiller
I would gladly contribute to this.
Ivain
I used to know a site like that, but it was mostly focused around fanfiction for the Inheritance Cycle, though original stories DID exist
Ivain
Unfortunately, it died a slow death years ago. Now the closest thing is fanfiction.com (?)
lurkingupvotetroll
Wattpad.
ExtremelyHappyGuy
http://365tomorrows.com/ is the closest I know as far as a website for short stories.
dovebair
The second story is a more Abrahamic retelling of the concept of Bodhisattva, enlightened souls that return to samsara to guide others up.
capngoat
I'm hoping the second one is what really happens. Because that is both beautiful and sad. I have tears in my eyes. Thank you for sharing!
Harambeshotfirst
I actually loved both of these, but I think I prefer the second.
lurkingupvotetroll
I'm actually trying to write one about a boy falling in love with a girl who's the personification of Death.
lurkingupvotetroll
I thought the second was more meaningful.
AmazingBillPatFan
The second one much better and more original.
FuckYeahImAwesome
The second is amazing, I welled up and all
Aerolfoz
Better written I would say honestly.
TonyStarch
The second one fits the theme better and it's just more original, but I'm not saying the first one was bad though.
YesImProductive
I kinda teared up when I finished the second.
SuperiorPosterior
The second one followed the prompt more, while the first felt more like the beginning to an action/comedy book for teens/young adults.
Aerolfoz
Plus it's rather chaotic, to me at least. Lot of room for improvement.
SuperiorPosterior
Aye, most definitely. As a small-time editor of fanfics, the first had no real structure, while the second flowed nicely.
lurkingupvotetroll
I'm interested in your process/mentorship! Was wondering if you have some tips.
lurkingupvotetroll
I'm trying to write a story about a boy falling in love with a girl who's a personification of Death. But I'm stuck.
SuperiorPosterior
Sure, I can help give some tips. Though, don't expect too many big words; writing/editing's more a hobby than a job, and I didn't Major. ;P
bobkirk22
Wow. Both of those tell incredibly powerful yet different stories. Very much enjoyed then.
JK3600
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wackywoohoopizzaman
I really enjoyed the second one
SHARKEATINGACHEEZBURGER
And then?
sciencebasedlifeform
.... and then they had sex. - fin
raknor88
Kinda hoping for more of the first one.
EvanderHeiro
Reminds me of a TV series (anime) called yami no matsuei
NokenMonk
Check out Piers Anthony's 'Incarnations of Immortality' series until someone write more of the first one.
MechanicOfTheSequence
There was a show, "Dead Like Me" that was pretty good with a similar plot
FatDylan
That was the one with a girl named Georgia and she got killed via falling toilet, right?
MechanicOfTheSequence
Yep, that's the one
DavieJonesSwimLocker
I'm sure he would oblige you if you're comment got enough upvotes.
Prunebane
I don't want to be an ass, but is autocorrect to blame for "you're / your" mistakes? I feel like it's starting to spread more as of late.
DavieJonesSwimLocker
It's possible, I know I trusted predictive text when I went with you're
RatElemental
Easy way to tell: Read what you wrote but replace you're with you are. If it makes sense, you're good.
projecthelios
Really ? You liked it that much?
NineThousandAndOne
Mooooooore
projecthelios
Im happy to say i will be writing a book
NineThousandAndOne
Thats awesome! Looking forward to reading it!
ButtDumpling614
Yes.
Snopony
Yes! Make an e book ^_^
altearithe
Yes please! It reminds me of one of my own short stories with a similar premise, but a much different twist that I really enjoyed.
KEDAAAH
Yes.
YouCantUnsuckADick
Dude, please do more. I'd buy the shit out of a book with that premise!
mre16
It was great! The concept was wonderful and genuinely a brand new idea to me.
moembo
Do it. Please?
Loialest
It's a great premise and I loved reading it, however the ending fell short a bit / no closure...it would be great to have more. 1/2
Loialest
2/2 However, I'd personally cut back on the swearing a bit -- without context it felt out of place? Cheers!
projecthelios
There really is supposed to be a lot more honestly.
quixotegut
Phenomenal idea with the sin purification and how to describe it within the body. THAT is some creative writing.
BurntMomWarfare
Oh wow the second one I loved. The old soul and the man that keeps going back. Would have been crazy of he had so much sin he had to make1/2
BurntMomWarfare
Those trips before he went into heaven but the fact that he just wanted to makes it sweet 2/2
qystein
I kinda got the feeling that the guy helping people once was Lucifer who commited the ultimate sin
Mehzeray
I got the feeling it could be Adam.
qystein
Yeah, Adam would work too
oct42
Or Jesus, taking on the sin of the world.
ladyamber
That's what I was thinking too as I was reading it.
qystein
Oh shit, thats pretty great
ThisIsPelicanECHO419isAnybodyReadinMe
Kind of reminded me of the story on here where people get physically scarred every time they lie
BurntMomWarfare
Why do you have no posts????????
46853
"You'll be okay."
ArchQuantum
I think I have one more short story in that setting worth telling if enough people are interested.
rares215
I don't wanna put a freakin' dot!
sleuthclaw
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YouDareMockTheSonOfAShepard
Yeee
LeGiant
Dot
Romanticist
This is my dot. There are other ones like it but this one is mine.
LinksRemix
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CanadianJEh
Interested!
Maxmar
Go for it!
screamingyetii
YEEESSSS
TripUpStairs
Count me interested.
Kate62
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sevenlabors
Absolutely interested.
PickledHero
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Winqan
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cinnamonwhirl1010
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queenofjungle
Super interested.
TheLastCabbagebender
Yes!
DanaSonOfBear
Dot. Dot dot dot dot
reigncity
This is my . There are many .'s but this one is mine.
imamermaidgangleader
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SpaghettiJoe
Please do!
47383
Dot
Thorudon
.
MynameisUndress
Definitely
ThisIsMyActualCrappyUsername
Yes?
projecthelios
Writer 1 here. I have decided to build on this, and will be linking here for at least the first few chapters
TheLingoBingo
Try to make it a little less conversation heavy and watch your punctuation and your grammar, it'll read more smoothly :)
Unstressessary
Have you read "Mort" by Terry Pratchett? It'd be worth a read.. it's the story of Death taking on an apprentice..
projecthelios
I haven't. The big thing i want to write about 8s making life wilorth while, so the whole death thing is really just a vehicle.
Unstressessary
I'm about halfway through it but I'd still recommend it. So far it's more about a butterfly effect type thing, def. not just about Death.
projecthelios
I can see how that fits in
Unstressessary
I'm sure yours will be different, it's just super relevant because I'm reading it right now. I look forward to seeing progress! Good luck!
sunyudai
Neat! I n that case, ahem "Call me Dotty and you die!"
projecthelios
Im not sure i get that reference
sunyudai
The Animaniacs: Yacko, Wacko, and Dot. Who has a tagline "Call me Dotty and you Die". It's my dot.
projecthelios
Oh yep. Its been a while. I know it dropped on Netflix not too long ago
animevil
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DavieJonesSwimLocker
Send me the link and I'll update the post.
Shadowth567891
Dude. That was an amazing read. Please update us with more chapters :D
projecthelios
Absolutely. I forgot to thank everyone, including you, as well.
ArchQuantum
I'll be sending a link too
DakotaLDE
Your story would work great in an RP. One person writes as Death, another as Death's replacement. Each time the writer of Death [1/2]
DakotaLDE
...has to hand over the RP to the replacement. The RP would only ever involve a couple people but over its life involve dozens.
projecthelios
I used to be super.involved in a scifi fantasy rp with a close freind. At one time we each had 3 plotlines and 12 characters. 1/2
projecthelios
I mean between the two of us, not each, but unfortunatly the freimdship fell through hard. I miss it all the time tho... 2/2
DakotaLDE
Happens to the best of us, I used to rp often with some old friends, we got involved in a weird friendship/relationship, things ended hard
AzzMort
When ever Death is mentioned as a person I always go to Terry Pratchett's Death.
OsoBlacno
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BingleyBingleyBeep
Time for your Three pee em meeting, Insert Name Here!
Ivain
yep, it's definitely my favorite incarnation
imbloodybrilliant
SAME!
sc1onic
Mine is death parody from bill and Ted bogus journey!
10tacles
I think death is represented more as a neutral/nice than bad. People have a bad image of it but representing it as bad would be too simple
LoTRFanatic42
"Despite rumour, Death isn't cruel- merely terribly, terribly good at his job."
PhycoFrenzy
CATS. CATS ARE NICE.
manthabat
"How do you get all these coins?" IN PAIRS.
manthabat
I'm making my way through Discworld for the first time. Death is easily one of my favorite characters out of any books I've read.
siyuri1641
Yes!! I always go there too
CrimsonWolf1999
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DeposedNigerianPrince
I jump to Piers Anthony's On a Pale Horse. That was the first personification of death I ever read.
CrimsonWolf1999
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Biglebowski748
JapAnus
Does anyone know the origin of the quote, "you can be a king or a chimney sweeper, but everybody dances with the grim reaper"?
BasilicaNero
Last words of Robert Alton Harris. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Robert_Alton_Harris
JapAnus
Thank you sir
Aldineri
I can't upvote that book enough!
DeposedNigerianPrince
I love the Incarnations of Immortality so much. My favorite interpretations of those figures ever.
Okiegoon
The first story reminded me of that book.
OsoBlacno
I'm commenting for a later read!
DeposedNigerianPrince
Pm me if you want a small summary or more details!
Havok707
The last is beautiful, First is actually an unfinished tv series of people working to take the souls out of the bodies ! forgot the name tho
FawkesSake
doot for later
KeeperofthekidS16
Dead Like Me I think...
xUsako
I'm still mad that the show got abandoned u_u
TheBufferkiller
Dead Like Me and Dirty Job. Reminded me of both.
kmet219
Dead like me which was based on a novel On a Pale Horse by Piers Anthony.
area42
That is totally what i thought of as well.
itlurks
There's also a Korean drama that's really good like this called "Goblin." cried my eyes out. Came out last year
Safetythird
Amazing drama!
danspurt
My first thought was Grim Fandango, but that was no TV series... But similar! Corporate-style grim reaping.
JPBf
And one of the absolute best adventure games!
projecthelios
I've actually never seen it. I dadnt even heard about it till this whole thing.
Iaintgivinmynametoamachine
Your writing is good but try to ease into exposition. Alot of what you said in three sentences could be implied in one about something else.
Totallyscrewedinaustin
It's a good show, you should watch it
MichaelCBennett
Except that wasn't suicide, i think it was a toilet from an airliner or space station or something.
razmann
toilet seat girl!
dontmindmycommentimaidiot
Oooh yeah
SchuKadaj
Knew it seemed familiar
sumothername
Toilet from a space station lips the main character.
FurToaster
lips?? ewww
sumothername
Hits* autocorrect is a bitch when I'm sick
billypink
Dead like me?
CabooseRvsB
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Havok707
Yes !
AtypicalTitan
Which is based on a book, "On a Pale Horse" it's one of my favorites
JimmyWalkerTexasRanger
^This. It is the Incarnations of Immortality series by Piers Anthony. Fantastic stuff!
Jacxy
No, dead like George. I'm only dead inside, she's only dead outside. Dead outside is more important for that line of work.
toomanyorifices
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MiniAsriel
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MrNoodlemansbrother
Yup. There's a movie, too.
Tomm2415
NO THERE IS NOT !!!!!!! I WILL NOT HEAR OF IT!!!!
InsanityBuildsCharacter
YES THERE IS! it's just baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaad.
ultradongle
Ah man, I got all excited because I never heard of the movie but loved the show. usually bad if it is that old and never heard of it though
fOrceez
Any good?
littlesquishablecake
the show is fantastic. It's dark, funny, and fantastic
InsanityBuildsCharacter
the tv-show's good, avoid at all costs the movie..
Calculussucks
Does it still have Mandy Patinkin?